Day one feedback
by Joe · 24 things on Twos
- Oatmeal
- I really like Day 20s voiceover
- REALLY like the sound on Day 20 too
- Change caption to something way shorter and maybe no hashtags?
- "@google you up?"
- "it's called 'Twos'"
- help [me] out by downloading "Twos" on app store
- Would love to see some AB test of "our startup" vs "my startup"
- I think "my" could be better since you're the only person we see and it makes it seem much smaller
- Productivity hacks
- Audio seems super muffled. I've noticed that the iPhone itself is the best mic so leaving it unobstructed when making the video is best
- First clip "the hook" should probably just be "productivity tip #1" without saying what the tip is
- I could be wrong about this. Potentially better hook suggestion below...
- I thought the benny at the end could have been said first and then the tool introduced after
- OPTIONAL: Are you someone who likes being productive? Here's a tip for you...
- CURRENT: Productivity tip #1 - Write things down
- "We have so much going on in our lives"
- "Writing things down in one place to save time..."
- "All you need to do is"
- Possibly add a call to action?
- "Follow me for more productivity tips"
- "If you liked this, follow me for more productivity tips"
- I would lay off the stickers. Your aura is much more cool, calm, peaceful and the stickers are distracting especially when they compete with the captions.
- This is gonna be #big